: Re: What should take precedence? Rhythm or clarity? We resumed our way, until we finally exited the woods and reached a valley. Two ridges stood on both sides, meeting together on the far

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Splitting up the sentences didn't alter the rhythm substantially. However, it did alter the meaning, in the sense that it sounds as if you are trying to emphasize that there were no trees and only bushes. Using very short sentence fragments can alter rhythm, but it does this by adding emphasis to elements. Within your. Writing. I don't think that was your intention, since that sounds normal for a valley on the outskirts of a woods.

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