: Re: Am I using too many adjectives/adverbs in the following piece? As I made my way uphill, I understood why An-Mei chose this place for her spiritual healing. I glanced around. Gorgeous

The problem is not too much. The problem is they are hollow.

That's all 'telly, not showy'. In particular, 'Gorgeous' and 'greatly' are worst offenders. Instead of depicting a gorgeous scene, you tell the reader that it is gorgeous.

Descriptive expressions ("green glow", " grayness") - facts, are good, and don't skimp on them. They can truly add life to a scene and make it impressive.

Reflective ones ("dazzling", "uplifting", "gently") - direct, sensory impressions - don't work quite as well, but they still contribute in a positive way.

Evaluative ("great", "gorgeous") - indirect impressions, appraisal of the summary aesthetic value - are counter-productive, hollow and definitely reduce the quality of writing.

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