: Re: Is the following "shortening" allowed in fiction? I know you can write stuff like this: Head on pillow, I glanced at the clock. My mind made up, I went over to the counter. How

@Bryan361

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Second one is good. First sounds weird. Third one is begging for another sentence:

And with that he put on the climbing shoes, the harness, and attached himself to the rope. At the cliff's edge he rechecked every knot one last time. Everything set, he threw the end of the rope down the cliff, and began his descent.

Maybe put in a mutter:

And with that he put on the climbing shoes, the harness, and attached himself to the rope. At the cliff's edge he rechecked every knot one last time. "All set," he muttered. He threw the end of the rope down the cliff, and began his descent.

But, straight answer to your question is "yes."

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