: Re: English, Commas According to Dr. Sharonâ€™s book, Survival of the Sickest, a hemochromatosis patient, Aran Gordon, experienced joint pain, heart flutters, and depression. Is this a run-on sentence?

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According to Dr. Sharonâ€™s book, Survival of the Sickest, hemochromatosis patient Aran Gordon experienced joint pain, heart flutters, and depression.

Do you have to include the patient's name?

It's not a "run-on" -- I wish teachers wouldn't use that term, which makes students wary of writing long sentences. A "run-together" sentence is two independent clauses joined by a comma (sometimes called a comma splice). You're not in that territory with this sentence.

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