: Re: how to write an essay in less wordy way This is an essay I excerpted from a writing course material.I need to omit uncessary words which make the essay wordy and longer than they should be..

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Well done on the first pass. There are a few other places where words can be omitted. If the option to add words (and punctuation) or otherwise restructure sentences is on the table, even more words can be omitted. However, since you didn't state that as an option, I present the following, further streamlined version:

Every time I had to do a writing assignment, I was always miserable. Due to
my complete lack of confidence as well as my total inability to express ideas (of mine) on paper, I had to work (almost) twice as hard as any other
student (in this world). This included spending hours (and hours)
looking at a blank page and (spending) more hours editing (essays of
mine), just to make sure I had (really) appropriate content,
organization, and grammar. Since English was not my first language, I
was concerned that I would not do (so very) well at the university.
When I entered (the class offered by) College Writing, everything
changed in a positive way due to the fact that my writing skills
increased throughout the semester.

In the beginning (of the semester), I had a lot of trouble with my
(first couple of) essays; however, with careful analysis, patience, and my
will to succeed, I started to write essays that I was (quite) proud of.
I learned that if I could relate any topic (of any essay) with my
personal experience, these essays were truly good (, and would submit it to my instructor).

Most of what I've omitted is clear from the context of this essay. For example, there's no need to keep mentioning essays.

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