: Re: How to show a crying/sad scene without using sentimentalism? Previously, I had no difficulty in showing a scene like that, and as for me, to show a crying scene I'd write something like "then

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Dr Salinger's approach shadowed over Maria, who was more than ready to
shake him for answers. She'd waited over two hours of silence and
growing dread for anything on Dad. But when the man hesitated and the
lines on his face deepened, she froze in her tracks. Yet, she heard
herself ask, "Is he..." Then the words sunk down into her chest at the
pitiful shake of his head. The "I'm sorry" that followed choked her
breath from her lungs, and suddenly he towered over her.

What did he say?

She clutched at the gold cross hanging from the chain. It pressed
white-hot against her skin. Each gasp tore down her throat and her
mind raced even as she lost herself in the storm. But Dad was just
fine last night! Didn't Salinger see it? Didn't he see Dad eager to
get up and go? She watched the game with him, laughed when he spilled
Ginger-ale at a touchdown of his favorite team.

No. He couldn't be gone. Not when he promised her he'd fight, dammit!
She pounded the cold floor. Hissed a breath through clenched teeth.
But the strength left her, even as she attempted to stand. Her throat
held back something between a sob and a shout. She had to see him.
Through the blur of motion and color she followed the doctor. She
would see him. And say goodbye.

(what you want to do is basically set the scene and describe the event in your character's view point. Use enough detail to convey what's going on without going too detailed. Hope this helps.))

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