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When writing stories in past tense (which is majority of the time) whether it be an essay for class or an unassembled essay for home and in my own time, I often find myself writing some of my sentences in the following way:
"No!" I yelled, ignoring him completely.
I always get corrected with the words after the comma. I have been told it is not written in the right tense...I don't understand how the tense would be wrong?
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Your sentence is correct. I went to the current issue of The Economist, looked up the first article I saw about English literature, and found two similar constructions. Here’s one (emphasis added):
The Economist, reviewing it in 1847, argued that it was “perfectly fresh and lifelike†and, as such, “far removed from the namby pamby stuff of which fashionable novels are madeâ€
It has been completely acceptable in the most formal English for centuries, to wit:
And God blessed them, saying, Be fruitful, and multiply, and fill the waters in the seas, and let fowl multiply in the earth.
Or more recently:
We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal, that they are endowed by their Creator with certain unalienable Rights, that among these are Life, Liberty and the pursuit of Happiness. That to secure these rights, Governments are instituted among Men, deriving their just powers from the consent of the governed [....]
(And if your instructor accepts those, you get to start sentences with conjunctions. Also to write sentence fragments.)
Why is it getting marked as incorrect? It might be a hypercorrection, like how I’ve had some people try to convince me that it’s always bad style or even bad grammar to use the word was. I’ve seen the claim that the construction you’re talking about is often misused, and that sometimes leads to the misunderstanding that there is a rule against it.
Let’s look at a sentence that some would accept as correct grammar and some would not: “He started his car, backing it out of the driveway.â€
One usage that some people flag as an error is using this construction for two actions that are not simultaneous. A driver first starts the car, then backs it out of the driveway; he was not backing it out of the driveway while he started the car. Others would accept this when the action in the simple past tense occurs immediately before the one that gets the present participle, as in this example. It is at the very least a common idiom. Fewer would accept, “She married him, divorcing seven years later,†as correct.
We see another pitfall with the sentence “He started his car, backing it out of the driveway,†when we compare it to, “She swerved out of the path of the car backing out of the driveway.†The clause backing it out of the driveway modifies he, but the noun immediately before it is car, so it is arguably a misplaced modifier. Using commas the way I just did can fix that ambiguity, but writers don’t do so consistently.
If I say, “I went up to the girl singing that song,†is she singing or am I? This construction, where the present participle comes after a main clause containing more than one noun, can be ambiguous about which noun the phrase is modifying and some people think you should always avoid it. Therefore, some sources say that “Singing that song, I went up to the girl,†is correct, but not the other way around.
Either might be the origin of your instructor’s belief that this usage is always wrong.
(I added an even earlier example here, at one point, but on a closer reading, I no longer think it is grammatically parallel.)
I would accept the sentence you have written, usually. It depends on the context.
Tenses in English are actually incredibly complex. (I have recently written a simple guide for distinguishing between the past/present/future simple/progressive/perfect/progressive perfect, which, to be perfectly honest, doesn't cover all tenses.)
Usually, I advise students to stick to one tense when writing a story -- past or present tense. However, things are not that simple. For example, in past tense narratives, present tense sequences can be very effective for creating tension and suspense. As well, sometimes future statements are appropriate.
If you are considering non-fiction, the past tense is conventional. However, talking to my wife, who is a professor of Greek history, she often uses the present tense to talk about past events.
I guess that you are not a native English speaker and you are trying to work out how to please an examiner/teacher/etc. All I can suggest is that you look for examples of the types of constructions you use in standard English texts (e.g. Victorian novels which are availble online for free) to show the person who thinks this construction is wrong.
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