: Re: Does adding an indefinite article in this sentence hurt the flow, or does it improve clarity? To me, it sounds fine to say "She wore a black shirt and red skirt", without the indefinite article

I would say "yes" to the headline question and the one in the post. It would possibly do both - improve the clarity and hurt the flow.

I'd go for a comma. "She wore a black shirt, and a red skirt revealing slim legs." That way the reader knows where to pause.

[Opinions differ on the serial (Oxford) comma. I've always been a big fan of it myself but my parents, Margaret Thatcher and Batman always advised against it.]

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