: Although the past tense makes sense due to your sentence construction, a different construction would allow the present tense, by setting a time frame: When Riley and Anna meet, Anna is a

Although the past tense makes sense due to your sentence construction, a different construction would allow the present tense, by setting a time frame:

When Riley and Anna meet, Anna is a beautiful girl with a smile on her face every day, her smile is his favourite thing about her.
In their conversations she never says anything to him about death, but of the wonders of life and nature.
After her death, Riley asserts he knew her smile was fake and Anna wanted to die, but does not reveal how he knows this.

(The last example is still a present tense character, talking about his own past).
I think this is the writer's choice; whichever you feel is the most clear and readable. A core directive of writing is to be clear to the reader.

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