: Re: Does this feel like natural English? Although I'm pretty confident in my English, I'm not a native English speaker. I need to write a short introduction for a symposium; I'd like to know if

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I heartily second @Cos Callis's suggestions. But I am more heartless than he, more savage; I would cut further. He suggests:

The following paper showcases the ways through which modern information technology spreads awareness to the general public of the importance of conservationism. This technology is but one of the many ways environmentalists gain a better understanding of the natural world.

To take just the first sentence:

This The following paper shows cases the ways through which how modern information technology helps spreads awareness to the general the public of learn the importance of conservationism.

Gives us;

This paper shows how information technology helps the public learn the importance of conservation.

But that's not good: "helps the public learn?" Ewwww! So:

This paper shows how information technology helps teach the importance of conservation.

And now for the second sentence:

This t Technology is but one of the many ways environmentalists gain a better understanding of the natural world. we learn about the world.

Technology is but one way we learn about the world.

And that's enough blood and Gore for today :-)

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