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Topic : Re: Does this microfiction provide a slightly surreal sense when describing an ordinary scene? In this short story I'm trying to describe an unexceptional scene in an exciting and compelling way. - selfpublishingguru.com

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First, I would break it up into more paragraphs. That enhances readability.

Second, using the adverb abstract is strange, but you do not gain surrealism doing so. You kicked me out of the story before I reached the first full stop (period, if you are an American).

Talking about the story: There is none! justkt pointed that out already.

Overusing adjectives/adverbs will bring you nowhere. If you want it to be surreal, describe the scene from an LSD viewpoint (yeah, the drug).

Assuming the protagonist has a terrible headache and needs to go to the bathroom fetching some aspirin, you could write: "He was walking through honey and it sounded pink." Well, I wouldn't use pink, but you get the idea.


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