: Re: Mentioning quickly repeated events in first person? When writing in first person, is it better to mention as little repetition of events as possible? Or can it improve writing in some cases

@Sarah872

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In this case I like the first one better but that probably isn't going to apply universally. For me the way that the first structure stretches the time of the encounter better evokes the feeling of standing on the threshold wondering what goes on. In this case, I feel, that the protagonist's experience of being left waiting is better illustrated by an exact-ish repetition of action.

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