: Re: Little disjointed scenes My MC is going through boot camp. Physically and mentally, he goes from high-school boy to soldier prepared for combat. Along the way there's struggles, there's new friendships

I suspect that the problem is that the training 'episodes' are actually background/peripheral to the main story you are telling.

You probably need to weave the training aspects into the journey of your main character (I think someone else may have suggested the same thing).

I try to avoid sections which don't carry the story forward.

Maybe touch on the training by having the main character and his friends discussing it after the event ... that way you could do something along the lines of a short intro into the nature of the boot camp, time passes, groups of recruits in the mess hall discussing what they have learned in amongst the main discussions of the story you are telling.

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