: Re: Tense-inadequate but Meaningful I was writing the conclusion to one of my short stories in which the main character has to endure a bit of humiliation so that everyone else gets to have a
Both the simple present and the present continuous sound a bit off combined with simple past in that way. Also, keep may not be the best verb to use, holding, clinging to, grabbing, riding, surfing etc. may be better.
Difficult to say what would sound better without knowing the preceding paragraph, but maybe use past continuous: "They were holding the high, but he took the volume."
Or my pick: "They were riding the high, but he was saddled with the volume."
Edit: alternatively try using the word "still" in the first half, along with present continuous - i.e. "They are still keeping the high, but he took the volume" or use because in the second half with the past tense - i.e. "They keep the high because he took the volume" either works
More posts by @Cugini967
: Translate or keep terms with diverse meanings? I struggle with a passage in a text that I gave in three translations. In one, the original word is kept, but as it's ancient Greek and I don't
: Do you include punctuation when a character cuts off in dialogue? So I have a question concerning punctuation. Let's say that Character A is talking to Character B. Character A, like most people,
Terms of Use Privacy policy Contact About Cancellation policy © selfpublishingguru.com2024 All Rights reserved.