: Re: Starting my second book. Would this be considered an info dump? Iâ€™m trying to open up the second book with the impact of the last book on my MC, but it looks more like an info dump. I

Technically, yes it is an info dump. But, you did it well, kept it pretty short, and I didn't feel like I was reading the instruction manual to my (insert appliance here) at all. In fact, you could probably get away with 2-3 times more information and call it a prologue if you needed to add more information. You also did really good on evoking the feeling you wanted, stressed out, insignificant and sad. I mean, I wasn't frozen with fear and bawling on the floor, but I felt it from the passage.
I like the spacing in the paragraphs too, where you put more emphasis on certain bits of information.

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: The pacing was unearthly slow When people disparage stories as "too slow" what that often translates as is a lack of engaging content - the stuff that makes you feel that the story

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: So you've got a solo Zeus girl living in a New York orphanage, but you don't have a solo Zeus girl enemy. That can make for a rather dull story, so I'll try to help you out. The easiest

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: Is it a good idea to pause a plot while doing a few one-offs and then going back? This is for my webcomic, and I'm trying my best to keep it about writing, sorry if it's off-topic or something.

: Re: Starting my second book. Would this be considered an info dump? Iâ€™m trying to open up the second book with the impact of the last book on my MC, but it looks more like an info dump. I

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: The pacing was unearthly slow When people disparage stories as "too slow" what that often translates as is a lack of engaging content - the stuff that makes you feel that the story

: So you've got a solo Zeus girl living in a New York orphanage, but you don't have a solo Zeus girl enemy. That can make for a rather dull story, so I'll try to help you out. The easiest

: Is it a good idea to pause a plot while doing a few one-offs and then going back? This is for my webcomic, and I'm trying my best to keep it about writing, sorry if it's off-topic or something.

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