: Re: How can I revise these sentences to be more correct while still keeping the effect? I have written these two sentences: Despite her temper, I loved her still. Or perhaps not despite;

@Kevin153

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The topic seems informal to me, and lends itself nicely to a more personal, less formal tone. I'm okay with it being not strictly grammatical.

Given that, consider a version that is even less grammatical and more informal:

Or perhaps not despite. Perhaps because of.

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