: Re: How can I revise these sentences to be more correct while still keeping the effect? I have written these two sentences: Despite her temper, I loved her still. Or perhaps not despite;

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Would you really want it in one pseudo-sentence? When it's not quite a sentence as such, why not have two for the right effect?

Despite her temper, I loved her still. Or perhaps not despite. Perhaps because of.

Leave some grammar out for the reader's imagination. Even a mark of interrogation showing a sense of 'I really wonder if it is ...' should be nice, I suppose.

Perhaps because of?

Or, would that be superfluous with perhaps? Perhaps.

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