: Re: How to avoid repetitive sentence structure? I've realized that I always start sentences with (name of character), he, she, it, they, her, his, the, after (a moment/that), and then. I wonder

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I love Dale's revision. What I also find useful and can help move the scene along is to start the sentence with the verb - it lends a feel of action:

... Sitting down, looking back at the moon, she now knew that she’d been left alone in the world, waiting for the moon to fall from the sky.

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