: Re: Should dull dialogue be removed completely? The following dialogue is from a novel I'm writing (first draft): "You're quiet tonight," Erin said to Benjamin, who seemed to be lost in thoughts.

@Frith254

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Yes, dull dialog should be removed completely (or transformed to interesting dialog).

That said, I assume you misunderstand "dull" in this context. As always in fiction it's the conflict which drives the story. And your first part has conflict:

"Yeah, it's killing me, you know. My boss should really hire more teachers."

Conflict: Problems with the boss

"Why don't you find something else? You've been doing this for a while. I bet you can find something better."

Conflict: Boy-friend sets her under pressure getting her ass up to search a new job.

"... No matter what, you can always move to my place."
"I don't think that would be a good idea."

Well, if that isn't a classical conflict, I do not know, how you define one.

Don't shoot all your ammo at the beginning. You want to increase suspense, so start low and add up piece by piece. It looks like you are doing exactly that.

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