: Re: Essay critique: flow and how compelling it is I dragged myself sluggishly out of bed and instinctively reached for my phone, then I remembered: there was no cell coverage or wifi.

This essay as it stands is not compelling.

We do not know why the narrator has traveled to visit Sarah.
We do not know where Sarah is.
We do not know why Sarah is there.
We do not learn Sarah's answer to the question: "Don't you feel lonely out here?"

We need to understand a bit more about the two characters.

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