: Writing style — comma, period and re-referring the object of the first sentence again as subject in second sentence Alex look around the room, it's almost empty except few small empty boxes

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I normally use repetitions when I want to emphasize something. Use repetitions in those examples, for me, would not be a good practice.

Just as an example.

I thought about it. I thought about it deeply, and realized it
was not the way.

In your example phrases, I would go for something like Dale suggested.

Alex looks around. The room is almost empty...

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Your first example is a not a grammatical sentence. It is a comma splice. It uses a comma to join two independent clauses.

Your third example uses repetition. Repetition serves to emphasize the thing that's repeated. It also introduces a kind of rhythm into the sentence.

Repetition is grammatically acceptable. Whether it's a good idea depends on whether you like the resulting emphasis and rhythm. I don't think "the room" is important enough to warrant the emphasis, but that may depend on what comes before or after these sentences.

Here is another way to structure the two sentences:

Alex looks around. The room is almost empty...

Because the second sentence immediately follows the first, the reader will make the connection.

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