: Re: Changing the way one addresses a character in a dialogue to create variation I wrote the following dialogue: After a moment, Eri's mother appeared from the kitchen, carrying a tray with

Switching between names, descriptions and titles for people is good because it creates variety, as long as it is clear when you are talking about the same person and when you are talking about different people. I don't think a reader would be confused by the difference between "mom" and "mother", so that's an excellent place to add some variety. Likewise, "Eri's mother" and "her mother" are good variations as long as there is no one else's mother in the scene to create confusion. As Mary says, I wouldn't repeat "Eri's mother" too often, I'd mostly use "her mother". Constantly repeating the "Eri's" sounds awkward, and so should be reserved for just a few occasions to add variety.

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: Re: Changing the way one addresses a character in a dialogue to create variation I wrote the following dialogue: After a moment, Eri's mother appeared from the kitchen, carrying a tray with

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: Techniques for creating variety in prose When I write my short stories, I usually end up using a direct style as follows: Tim remembered the day he had to say goodbye to Cathy. He did

: Referring to people in a book I'm writing a book (travelogue) about Japan, comparing it to Sweden, where I'm from. During my travels I communicated mostly in Japanese but occasionally in English

: Overusing "the" and "I" I'm not a native English speaker, and I find that my English writing contains too many definite article "the" when writing scientific reports, and too many "I" when writing

: What kind of rhythm should I use for these settings? I am not particularly experienced with using rhythm in creative writing so please note that I am only a beginner. By "rhythm" I am referring

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