: Re: Am I breaking the "show don't tell" rule in the following passage? Then, as if sensing my presence, the girl turned around. She looked young. Probably sixteen or seventeen. She had long

I don't like "Even though there was nothing unusual in them,...". The fact that the narrator can't describe them -- except by their effect on his perception of her face -- makes them quite unusual. My attempt at a rewrite:

But what struck me the most were her eyes. I can remember nothing
about them, whether blue or brown, large or small. I only remember
they made her face look lifeless, completely devoid of expression. I
was staring at an empty canvas.

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: Where could I get a sports fiction short story published? I've found Stymie magazine, but are there any other magazines devoted primarily to sports themed fiction writing? I think my story stands

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: How to write a summary of an article or any text print? For example I am given an article and asked to write a summary for money; where do I begin? Do I just read the article, and kind

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: I beg to differ with you. For lack of a better all-inclusive word, I call all of that "writing." The actual setting-down of the words is just one part of writing. And even once that

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: First of all, if a fiction book's purpose is "to show what will happen to the world, if something changes," then that's going to be one booooring book. Take, for example, Gattica. You

: Re: Am I breaking the "show don't tell" rule in the following passage? Then, as if sensing my presence, the girl turned around. She looked young. Probably sixteen or seventeen. She had long

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: Where could I get a sports fiction short story published? I've found Stymie magazine, but are there any other magazines devoted primarily to sports themed fiction writing? I think my story stands

: How to write a summary of an article or any text print? For example I am given an article and asked to write a summary for money; where do I begin? Do I just read the article, and kind

: I beg to differ with you. For lack of a better all-inclusive word, I call all of that "writing." The actual setting-down of the words is just one part of writing. And even once that

: First of all, if a fiction book's purpose is "to show what will happen to the world, if something changes," then that's going to be one booooring book. Take, for example, Gattica. You

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