: Re: Should I get rid of short sentences that don't provide much information? I realized I have the habit of adding small sentences that don't provide much information: Eri searched her memory,

They fulfill a good role for rhythm and flow, but they are disruptive as distinct sentences. Yes, short fragmented sentences when you're not in the middle of a breathless action are a bad practice - not terribly bad, but less than optimal.
This is easily remedied though.

Eri searched her memory, but came out blank. She couldnâ€™t even remember what she was doing at that time. Which was odd; she didnâ€™t consider herself particularly smart, but when it came to remembering things, her brain never failed.
But what struck me the most were her eyes. Even though there was nothing unusual in them, they made her face look expressionless, lifeless. It felt strange; like staring at an empty canvas.

Commas, semicolons, colons, dashes, ellipses are your friends in cases like these.
Especially learn to love the semicolon. It's powerful; doesn't disrupt the flow like full stop does; can be applied nearly everywhere where full stop or colon are less than perfect choice, and once you learn to use it, you'll find it to be the missing link between the colon and full stop that finally makes your sentences flow naturally.
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