: Re: Does this opening relate to the message? This is now my third attempt of writing the opening of my book. I took What's advice and tried to send a message to the readers. the message was:

@Moriarity138

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As a suggestion, why not open with the altercation itself?
You can use the fight to illustrate your protagonist. Is he short and slight? Tall and gangly? (Also think about how this might change as the story progresses.)
Show his reaction to the dog's mistreatment as a way to provide insight into his internal motivations. Why is he fighting? Most especially, why is he fighting when he probably knows he won't win?
Give a brief glance of who he is fighting. Is this a 'same-bullies-different-day' fight, or an unknown group?

Painting a compelling snapshot of your protagonist (not just appearance, but his frame of mind, motivations etc.) right from the beginning emotionally invests the reader in who he is as a person and drives interest in who he might become by the end of the story. Beginning with the fight would, imho, be a strong entrance that is true to your theme.

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