: Re: A good approach to show dialogues over radio communication? The novel's in first person. I'm working on a scene where there are five people dispersed on different floors of a building, all talking

Your dialog itself is fine as-is, though I would suggest not using dashes and quotation marks to separate the infra-paragraph speakers. Unquoted italics may be appropriate, or just list them as quotations.

The technique you're using is treating the distant speakers as a kind of greek chorus, albeit one made up of named characters and not an undesignated mob. It works very well in the flow of the text provided, and is significantly superior to listing each voice on its own paragraph, as common typology demands.

Alternately, you could not list the dialog of those not present, although doing so would require a significant re-working of the text.

On a different note, it's slightly jarring to switch from "a sudden voice" to "my follower". FWIW.

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