: Is the following repetition unnecessary? I peered through the glass. It was a bird. At first I thought it was a crow because of its black feathers; they were so black they shone

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I peered through the glass.

It was a bird. At first I thought it was a crow because of its black
feathers; they were so black they shone in the moonlight like a pair
of sword blades. However, after looking at it keenly, I realized it
wasn't. First, its beak wasn't that big. The beak of a crow was thick
and long, as if it were an extension of its face. The beak of this
bird, on the other hand, was almost as small as a needle. Also, unlike
the angry eyes of a crow, this bird's were round and expressionless.
They didn't convey any feeling—just pure, indifference void. The
most noticeable feature, though, was a yellow spot on each wing. They
looked like the rank badges that officials wear on their shoulders.

As you can see I repeat The X of the crow...and X of the bird twice.

Is the repetition above unnecessary? Should I use another phrasing instead?

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