: Re: When mentioning two items in a sentence, should I specify which one I'm referring to in the next one? This is a bit complicated to explain. Here's an example: She had green eyes and extremely

@Radia543

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I think you'd do better moving the mention of hair to the second sentence:

She had green eyes. Her hair curled like ferns clustered in a mountain forest.

Or one sentence:

She had green eyes and her hair curled like ferns clustered in a mountain forest.

Having said that, I'm not really able to picture ferns as hair, but that might just be me.

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