: Re: How should I write two huge evil reveals in one climax? I am only plotting my story as of right now, and I'm trying to put together a good climax. So far, A's parents were murdered by C.

As outlined, I see three major problems with this:

It's undermotivated - B "has never cared for" either side? That's pretty weak motivation for double-crossing betrayal.
It doesn't make much sense - Why wouldn't B have killed A or C before, given that she had both of their trust?
One betrayal undercuts the emotional impact of the other, and without much gain.

However, I see a solution that would improve all of these issues:
Give B a solid, very good reason for hating C, and then make her betrayal of A the price she has paid to win C's trust. I wouldn't have her actually target A --again, it strains credibility she would have held off so long if that was her aim. Instead, her betrayal of A opens the door for her to strike at C.

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