: Re: Is it OK to have two different POVs in a same paragraph (third-person omniscient narrator)? This is my first time writing a third-person omniscient narrator. And just got stucked in a dilemma.

While I agree with Laurenâ€™s answer to the question of "Is it OK to have two POVs in one paragraph,â€ this piece could easily be read as the narrator knowing his girlfriend well enough to know that she travels light, and why.

The opening line; "Unlike most girls," seems more like something he'd think of her than something she'd think of herself. The rest of the piece could easily be something Iâ€™d say about my wife, and feels perfectly natural as being from the boyfriendâ€™s perspective.

In fact, if you hadnâ€™t have asked your question around the piece I would have assumed that the POV had not changed to hers.

If you plan on then moving on to the rest of the piece being in her POV then I'd recommend splitting out the last part into its own paragraph. But if you intend to remain in the POV of the boyfriend for the rest of the section then keeping the piece as it is will work fine.

Also, keeping the piece as it is will help avoid the far greater confusion of a sudden change of POV followed by a sudden change back.

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