: How would I improve the language and structure of this farewell email? I will shortly be moving to another a role within the same organisation and was wondering if you could advise on how

I will shortly be moving to another a role within the same organisation and was wondering if you could advise on how I could improve the language and structure of this farewell email. It seems a bit drawn out at the moment and I'd like it to retain the sincerity yet exude a sharpness that will create future opportunities by extending bridges.

Dear all,

As many of you know, today is my last day with compliance. Through
this farewell email, I wanted to thank you for your continued support
and guidance. During the last six months, I have had the privilege to
work with genuinely talented people like yourself, who have helped me
grow both personally and professionally.

With my first rotation
drawing to a close, I look back with pleasure on everything that we
have accomplished together. I only hope that I find in my new role a
fraction of the encouragement, gratitude and opportunities that I have
found here.

I have really enjoyed my time and will miss working with
you all. I owe you an enormous debt of gratitude and I wish each one
of you, the very best in all your future endeavours, both professional
and personal. Thanks again for everything.

Regards

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It's a bit gushing but I guess that's your style. It looks good -- you don't really need help with writing. Except

Capitalize "Compliance" if it's a department name.
Replace "talented people like yourself," with "talented people," -- they know you're addressing them.
Replace "I only hope that I find in my new role a fraction of the encouragement" with "I hope that I find in my new role the encouragement" -- toning it down a notch.

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