: Are the following examples violations of first-person limited? We ordered pork belly, beef liver, and lamb slices—a selection that made our tongues melt and our stomachs heat up.
We ordered pork belly, beef liver, and lamb slices—a selection that
made our tongues melt and our stomachs heat up.
Rattled by a sound or shake that only Sumire had detected, she picked
up her phone.
Are these POV violations (first-person limited)?
If so, how to modify them so there isn't a violation anymore?
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The Animorphs fanchise used this exclusively through all 54 main title books (told the main story through a fixed rotation of one core cast per book), five "Megamorphs" books (told from a rotating POV of the core cast in a single book) and 5 Chronicles books (told from the POV of one or more non-cast members and almost all exclusively expanding on the background of the main title books).
In books where the POV would shift between characters, a single POV was used during one chapter and each chapter opened noting who the current POV was. The main titles were almost always a single exclusive POV but there were points where the nature of the story was such that a second POV required. The one I best recall was book 19 (The narrator does warn about this in the first chapter that it couldn't be told faithfully entirely by her and that she'd let us know when another character has to fill us in on the gaps, which is why I remember it happening in that one instance. It's appearance was early enough in the series that only a few readers would likely know this was a common style outside of the main title.).
It was also strongly hinted that the books were the narrator's recollection of past events and not recent occurrences that the narrator was writing down the day of (some events may call into question how this recollection was collected, but best not to think too hard on it). Aside from the above mentioned explination of the POV switch, the first Chronicle Book (which has a single narrator) is explicitly said to be a ritual part of death in his culture and is functionally similar to a deathbed confessional to frame the rest of the story. The events surrounding his death were previously depicted in the first main title book.
We ordered pork belly, beef liver, and lamb slices—a selection that made our tongues melt and our stomachs heat up.
We ordered pork belly, beef liver and lamb slices -- a selection we knew would make our tongues melt and our stomachs heat up.
Rattled by a sound or shake that only Sumire had detected, she picked up her phone.
Sumire suddenly appeared rattled, and reached for her phone. "Did you guys feel that?"
In both examples the POV character seems to have information they should not. They don't know how others experienced the food order, nor do they know what - if anything - Sumire is reacting to when she picks up her phone.
Instead, focus on the perception of this experience, or emphasize that these are things the POV character thinks or is assuming about the goings-on.
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